Man, I’m still kind of stunned over how well yesterday’s lines turned out. If it’s cool with you guys, I’m going to practice a little more with these new Best Direct Response Headlines and revisit an old list.

My last 5-hour Energy post fell a little short of expectations. Let’s see what building off a stronger base might do…

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Here’s 5-hour Energy pt. 2:

1 Most office coffee tastes like mud by mid-afternoon. But that’s when you need it most.
2 Give me the any job in the world, and I’ll show you to how to do it more productive
3 How to kick start mornings, power through afternoons, and still sleep at night
4 What would you do with 5 more productive hours every day?
5 To the parents who wish they could keep with their kids
6 If you’ve already been caught napping at your desk, don’t read this. It’ll make you feel foolish.
7 5 powerful hours to a more productive day
8 The difference between 5-hour and the knockoffs is 5-hour actually works
9 Who else wants a more productive day?
10 Don’t drink another cup of coffee, until you’ve had 2 ounces of 5-hour
11 How 2 ounces of energy can keep you going for 5-whole hours
12 We always have 14 different flavors, 2 strengths and a decaf version of our energy shot
13 The difference between 5-hour and coffee, is that 5-hour tastes good at any temperature
14 What would become of your mornings, if you suddenly weren’t sluggish
15 For the woman who won’t settle for less quality time being awake throughout the day
16 New energy shots give you the energy to run 29 hours a day
17 Announcing a new way for adults to be more productive for 5-hours each day
18 To the men and women who want to keep up their children
19 What’s the best way to feel good all day? The power source may surprise you
20 To the modern day warrior who wants more power every day
21 No-name energy shots might never kick in. Ours start working the moment you drink it.
22 An easy way to make your day more productive
23 The premium gasoline of energy shots
24 Is it cheating to feel this good all day?
25 Days are better when you’re not tired
26 The same energy as the bigger cans, but without all the sugar and extra chemicals
27 How to increase your energy without changing a single thing about you
28 Energy drinks can be as big as 24 oz. Ours is only 2
29 To the active adults who don’t have time to be tired
30 Tired is for the competition
31 Now you don’t have to go through the motions of being awake
32 Announcing a new catalyst for adults seeking an escape from tired
33 Now you don’t have to worry about keeping your pick-me-up hot or cold
34 The little bottle of energy that’s ready whenever you are
35 To the hardworking adult who wants nothing less than to be more productive each day
36 Almost everyone can use a more productive 5-hours. Here’s how to make it happen
37 Most energy drinks takes a while to kick in. Ours starts working the moment you swallow.
38 You may not feel sleepy now… But why wait until it’s too late?
39 2 powerful ounces are the reason why energy levels are soaring
40 How to turn 2 oz. of energy into an afternoon of productivity
41 I’ve got 300 minutes of go-time with 5-hour Energy
42 For everyday people who want to achieve more
43 Turn yourself up to 11
44 You may not be tired now, but I want you to drink this before it’s too late
45 In just a few minutes, you’ll have more energy than you knew possible
46 You’re not having another cup of coffee, are you?
47 You’ll never miss feeling tired
48 Make tired for other people
49 Would you believe I used to slough through afternoons?
50 How to develop an internal battery that will last for more hours, run clean, and never crash at the end
51 Now 2 ounces of energy pack the same wallop as 16 of the other guy’s
52 I’d like to give this to my fellow man… while he’s still awake to enjoy it
53 Now 24-hours will seem like more than enough time
54 Helping tired people perk up
55 Almost everyone hits a wall at 2:30. Here’s how to blast right through it.
56 You can be twice as productive at 2:30 than you were yesterday
57 Which athlete took the 5-hour? And which stuck with Gatorade?
58 All the energy you can handle—but never more
59 Is it really fair that being alert can be this easy?
60 Kiss tired goodbye
61 I’d like to give a bottle to any tired mom…before they fall asleep on duty
62 The 2 oz. energy shot that has fewer calories than a diet coke
63 How to turn your energy levels onto a higher gear
64 What’s the best way to stay alert? The answer may be smaller than your think
65 Like Red Bull, without the skateboards
66 You’ve never had it before, but I want you to see what not being tired feels like
67 A more productive day for hard-working adults
68 Who else wants to get through their day without an afternoon nap
69 Helping you get more out of your day, 5-hours at a time
70 You, at your best, all the time
71 Life is better when you’re awake
72 You’re twice as productive as normal with 5-hour
73 Would you believe I used to feel tired?
74 The difference between Red Bull & 5-hour is all the sugar
75 We sell the same amount of energy as a 16 oz. can, with 100% less sugar
76 We’re always available at every gas station, convenience store and grocery store nearby
77 Now! More energy without the sugar crash
78 A new energy drink that gives you a cleaner burn without the crash
79 Sugary energy drinks come in 16 oz. cans and cause you to crash. Ours comes in a 2 oz. bottle and doesn’t.
80 If you’ve been fighting tired all day, it’s time to change your pick-me-up
81 Don’t struggle through one more cup of burnt coffee until you try this energy shot
82 Tired strikes at the same time every day. Here’s how to prevent it.
83 Afternoons without the hump, if you’re a smart shopper
84 Which co-worker had the 5-hour? And which had plain ol’ coffee?
85 An easy way to get more energy
86 Coffee gives you a quick start. But your day lasts longer than your cup.
87 For a man who wants to feel like one million bucks, for only $2.99
88 How to increase your stamina for daily wear-and-tear, without a single cup of coffee
89 Your low energy levels can be predicted—and prevented
90 Get a little more out of your day
91 When sleep seems far away, 5-hour makes it all OK
92 If you’ve already sloughed through your day, don’t read this. It’ll make you sad…
93 Give me any job at any hour of the day, and I’ll show you how I can be energetic while I work it
94 How to start mornings fast, make afternoons strong, and not feel tired until bedtime
95 What would your life be like if you had 5 more hours of energy?
96 Kicks tired to the curb!
97 I’m 2 ounces heavier & 5-hours better
98 Strop dragging through the day—and lift yourself up
99 Imagine your mornings if tired weren’t a factor
100 Life is better without a snooze button
101 All the power you need, at whatever temperature you’ve got ready

 

Overall: They’re good, but I’m not as blown away as yesterday. I’d say some lines are really strong. Several others read a bit too much like a cheesy ad. Which is kind of 5-hour’s thing, so maybe…

Lessons: The lines I like best are the ones that built off the original template, but had my own spin on it. So I need to keep doing that. It’ll take a little more tinkering to get these into my system.

  • A little clickbait-y at times—which is the challenge now that the great lines have been so commercialized
  • I know this might not be as much fun to read as the others, but it’s all part of the growth process
  • I wish I could share the list I’m working from with you, but it was part of a paid course. Otherwise I totally would.

Time: 45 minutes. These were quick since I was working directly from the template.